I wish you'd continue. =(

aw that is so swet and so sad :( but i love it!

WRITE MORE. AGGH. YOU MUST CONTINUE THIS!

All the songs .. they're just magical. They are. And -gasp- families selling pretty children as pets! That is horrible.

Oh my.. I hate the Pet Store -.- I love your words. I don't know; I just lovelovelovethem! "Did you know that sugar, if you eat too much, will make your gums melt and your teeth fall out? Ick!" This bit.. I just feel it seems a little OOC for Aja. Or maybe just the story in its entirety. The tone is so magical and serious and suddenly, 'Ick!' Haha, I don't know.

Hmhmm.. typo here. "their is something wanting in these people" -- their to there, I believe. Ookay, how do Andromeda and Aja sing? I've never wondered til now >< She takes Aja's head in her hands and..? Weird.. o_O But as usual, great chapter! I don't know how you make everything so real.

Your descriptions are still amazing! How do you do it? How?
Hmm... poor little girl! Please update soon!

Ooh! Sad!
This is really beautifully written! You use such excellent descriptions! WOW.
Eh- sorry for not reviewing quicker... my computer was busted for a few weeks... bleh.
Ah! But please continue! I can't wait to read more!

Whoa. Beautiful imagery here! I don't know what universe you're playing this in but really! It rocks. =D Love the basilisks and the Bird Room.

First things first: while reading this, I noticed a typo halfway down the page. I'm not sure exactly where, and I'm far too lazy to go back up and look...but if you're interested, you could hunt it down and fix it, I guess.

That aside, I liked this chapter a lot.

You write the music yourself, don't you?

That the people who inhabit the city are less...well, alive, than Andromeda and Aja is a nice touch, and a pretty accurate description of the situation today...the cities kill you.

Anyway, my feelings on cities aside...good work.

I finished this, and I wanted more...and by "more", I mean "pages and pages" more. Other than that slightly fatuous comment, I have nothing to add.

Well, except: Keep writing!

Ok, now you've got me hooked on this story...so don't you dare not update frequently, ya hear? Or by Darwin, I'll...well, I'm not quite sure what I'll do, but it'll be nasty.

Anyway, to proceed with the standard fanboy babble...I liked it a lot, it's really good, I wish I could write fiction this well...etc., etc., etc.

The outstanding thing is the description...I can SEE what you're talking about, what you were imagining as you wrote. That's not too common, especially with authors who're reduced to peddling their stories here on FictionPress. If you keep trying, you might get published...who knows?

Another thing: I like how you wrote this from the kid's point of view. It's nice to just see what Aja sees, without having to wade through all of the analysis that an adult applies to his/her perceptions. It lets the reader draw his own conclusions about the sights.

Keep updating!!

Wow... you use excellent descriptions! *stares in amazement* I really liked it! Please continue soon!

Magic. Pure magic.