Creepy and good, but a lot of spelling mistakes (ie tried not tryed, wiping not whipping)

Hey- I IMed you before and you told me to check out your story. It's pretty exciting, you have great description which you balance well with action. I will read the next chapter somewhat soon- if you get bored come check out my "marriage vs. murder" story- it'd be appreciated. Alrite, well write on!

Wow, this is really good! Plenty of guns, violence, and rebelion. My favorite! Keep writing!

The storyline is excellent, and I am eager to see where you will go with it. Will this one become a story of a man's redemption or the story of his eventual undoing? With an author like you there's just no telling. Patiently awaiting the next spin on this thrill ride story.

good chapter. glad most of it was a dream. consider lowering the r-rating. r-rated stories are automatically censored by fictionpress. unless of course, there is massive violence and sexuality ahead.

good so far. a few minor spelling mistakes.