I noticed that your stories are getting longer in chapter size...poor you... and you already know that I love the Keena and Jabez stories!

LONG LIVE KEENA AND JABEZ!

Keena, your main protagonist, seems to be overly affected by emotion. In BlackDog, you had her the emotionless mercenary. Now she cries over the death of a 'demon'. If you are having her finally face the pain of her loss, maybe another scene or two of her dealing with the past.Still a great story and very well told! I like Keena and Jabez, but for some reason distrust Valdir. Hopefully your next story will provide some backstory.

Is killing Chenzai really that easy? *raises eyebrow* Good job...although i don't think she's really dead...

Hmm...that ranks as one of the stupidest things Keena has ever assumed...after all, Chenzai didn't show up in Id's scans before. I was completely expecting her/him to be lurking somewhere in the cave!

*sort of wanted to see Keena and Jabez drag the brother kicking and screaming out of the house* Hmm...why didn't Jabez use his image-shifting ability from BlackDog to get into the city?

Evil Chenzai looking like a little girl? *gets an image of Samara from the movie 'The Ring'...creepy*

Ah...I was wondering when Keena and Jabez would confront the issue of him killing her parents.

*still wants a description of the city metronome* *pouts*

Did I mention I love these stories?

Okay, there's another part?
Write it now and post it.
Very good.
Luv Dittany x

Very good. Next?

Oh, brilliant! (Have I already said that??)
Let there be some sexual tension between Keena and Valdir, that makes Jabez jealous!
Luv Dittany. x

Oh, lot's of twists! Next chapter as fast as poss, please!

Very good! Next chapter please?

Okay, one last time before I come over there and make you write it... MAKE THEM KISS OR FALL IN LOVE. Thank you.
Oh, by the by great chapter.