the power in me was kinda weird

but that was good

i like it! it fows well and has deep meaning.-"prom":"night"

This is so not crappy, it shows the power you have within you that allows you to be free. Great and soulful! :)

~~Trinity

Well, it's definately not crappy. It's really good, honestly. It's simple, not forced, and poems don't always have to rhyme so this is good for that reason, too.

Just returning the favour.~ShadoWings

Heyy, this poem is col! It makes me feel all.. patriotic.. somewhat =D. The stanzas and the rhythming is good, but yeah, the rhyming needs a bit of work. It's really good though, so I don't think you'll want to change it. =D Keep it up!!

Hm... Good paragraphing in this one! ^_^ I admire you for you ability to write sad and more positive poems with emotion and beauty. =D But maybe you could try to rhyme a little more.. (But looking at your other poems, I think it's just this one that needs improving. ^_^. I'm sorry if I sound too.. I don't know. Egoistic? Heh.) But yes, your poems are beautiful, and I hope I'll get to learn more from you! Keep writing! ^_^

~Kaze of the Sand

It wasn't crappy! I like your poems! They're filled with emotion. Although its really nice as a free-verse, maybe you should try something that rhymes? (but you don't have to listen to me--I'm the person who's no good at poems...*sweatdrop*) But I think it adds up to the beauty of the art of poem writing, and I think you're very talented. Anyway, write more! ^^

For being a poem type you say you're not so good at, it is very empowering and you do very well to convey the message. Good job, keep it up.

really good poem. my favorite part must be:
I'm falling an endless fall
With no to catch me, with no one to save me
I've felt like that before. well, good poem, keep it up