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| the flaming river 2008-07-23 ch 4,  | abusetalk about selfish. Anyway I wish you would continue it. It's funny |
| bite~my~ass 2005-03-29 ch 5, anon. | abusei find it weird that after just what...a day? that they suddenly start KINDA getting alone. Waiting for the next one! |
| Kathy 2004-07-23 ch 4, anon. | abuseHey Qleo_chan! I LOVE this story! And get the next chapter out quick! Ot else I'll get my behind off this chair and personally walk up to where ever you and your laptop are. Lol, joking. Anyways, great story! ((Where do you get all these ideas from?!). |
| Isla Sangue 2004-07-22 ch 4, | abuseVery good!! Next chapter soon, please. Luv Dittany x |
| Summas Angellove 2004-07-21 ch 4, anon. | abuseI like your plot and characters so far. But you've really got to get out of that single sentence format. It made sense in the beginning because it laid down Caramel's personality. But for this to really become something more than just cut up thoughts, you really need to "thread" the story better, with more DISCRIPTIVE, CONNECTING SENTENCES. This might be just me personally, but it seems like jumbled mush right now. I think you've got a great idea for this story, but it would really enhance it to add substance to that backbone idea. |
| Drifting Rose PEtal 2004-07-21 ch 4, anon. | abuseThe last chapter was cool too but I am too lazy to review for it as well. Nice chapter but in some parts it is kind of hard to read at some spots so you may want to go back and edit some. Other than that, wonderful job |
| Baby_Cleopatra 2004-07-21 ch 4, anon. | abuseHey Mizz Qleo Chan...I wuv tha story...u Better update quick...i wanna kno watz gonna happen to that annoying, mean ,selfish, inconsiderate, spoiled...wait wat waz i sayin again? o yea...i wanna kno watz gonna happen to Cam... bieyz |
| Isla Sangue 2004-07-20 ch 3, | abuseAh! That had to be the funniest story I have read so far on FP.com! Next chapter as fast as you can, please! Luv Dittany x |
| Maaaaar... 2004-07-15 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou know who this is. Great story! Keep up the good work! |
| Drifting Rose Petal 2004-07-15 ch 2, anon. | abuseHey! Another good chapter, update soon |
| mo 2004-07-15 ch 2, anon. | abuseit was great! plzz update! |
| Bubblez 2004-07-15 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow...Very nice start. Reminds me of someone...anyways...cant wait till i read chapter 2! |
| selvana a.k.a BANANA 2004-07-15 ch 2, anon. | abuseluved it its so cute...but is that it i wanna know wat is gonna happen next...i luv that story its adorable |
| blahandchocolatechips 2004-07-15 ch 1, | abusehey!! cool story. i am all for the original today :) update soon |
| anonymously_infamous 2004-07-15 ch 1, anon. | abuseHey, great story, sorry about being anonymous, computer wont let me log in... but cool story, please continue:) |