|Reviews for Sanctuary|
| Bri-Cathleen 1/7/08 . chapter 1
i really like this one
| Jackie Paws 8/10/07 . chapter 1
Aw. Sweet stuff. If only it always held true. T.T
"But some of those good friends I have no more
One day we just stop talking
And hanging around like before."
I really liked that part, though it's sad, because it does happen in real life. And then, the pick-me-up,
"I don't think it will fade.
Out of all the friends I knew,
I'm so glad that you stayed."
Those are my favorite lines, especially the last one. It really creates the feeling of something special and eternal. "Stayed." That just really strikes a chord. That last line really seems akin to the line "I trust you," for some reason.
You've got a knack for this real-life feelings poetry stuff. o Off to read some more.
| Knightmage 5/23/07 . chapter 1
that's a really sweet poem
| On The Esplanade 11/18/06 . chapter 1
Aw, that's really sweet. I can't imagine what I would say if my friend wrote something like that to me. Lovely job.
| Atheneon 11/11/06 . chapter 1
Very good. I could feel your lonelyness at first and then your warm fuzzyness at the end. You're very good at writing emotions into your work.
| ignominy 11/2/06 . chapter 1
the only reason i don't really get this is because i've grown up with two older sisters. i like the poem, it good really, but it doesn't connect with me i guess. thats not your fault though. i've read some poems like this but yours is original, in that you've found a friend you like more than a sister.
| tadzendol 9/11/06 . chapter 1
Sorry I didn't reply to your review sooner, I haven't been on the computer in a while.
The rhyming's a bit...
I don't know...
Good job though.
i like it.
| Kristina Suko 9/2/06 . chapter 1
The poem's meaning is so beautiful. I'm the only girl in my family, and my best friend is like a sister to me; this poem could apply to us. I love the meaning behind the words.
However, the way you've worded the poem makes it sound like a bland paragraph chopped into poetry form. The word choices are so-so, and the sound of it is like a children's story.
I don't mean to offend by saying that; I just want to be honest and not give you the false impression that there's nothing to be improved on. It has the potential of portraying a lot more emotion and also more of your lonliness and yearning for companionship.
It would also help if there was more rhythm and rhyme; with the unflowery choices of words, rhythm and rhyme greatly improve the poem. Don't get me wrong; free flowing poetry is great, but only if it has a lot of drama and description.
D Maranwe Telrunya
P.S. Thanks for your review on Shattered Glass Dreams D
| Glittering Innocence 11/28/05 . chapter 1
Wow! Amazing Poem! Thank you for reading my poem, now you can read my story! Please? I'm desperate! I'll put this poem in the fave stories and fave authors list?
| blood thirst 33 3/5/05 . chapter 1
very well written, thank you for reviewing
| Shadows Fury 2/6/05 . chapter 1
*Grins* thanks for the review's, there greatly appreciated. So, i was checking if you updated "Predators of the Night" *Sighs* which you haven't yet, *Glares* But I saw it's being edited. So, I came across this poem and thought, just...wow. It has a really nice flow to it and it's something I feel I can relate to. Yup, and lot's of emotion too. *Chuckles* and it rhymes.(Did I spell that right?) Anywho, I always have a hard time to doing that. All in all, a very well done poem if I do so say myself. Keep up the great work...and hurry up and edit Preadtors of the night! I won't to read the next chapter...Hehehe...no pressure, huh? Keep on writing.
| Silentwriter9 1/27/05 . chapter 1
this was wonderful. and i'm an only child too so i know what you mean. great job with this ).
| empath89 1/15/05 . chapter 1
aww, that's a really cute poem. i like it. and it's true about sisters. they're sometimes very annoying, but they're there for you when you need them. so it's great when people (you) have a friend that's as good as a sister.
| Clau Delomre 1/13/05 . chapter 1
Hi, you asked me to reveiw, so I will It's a very nice poem, and I think you should keep at writting poetry, it was good and flowed well. I hope to read more from you -alice
| RoQ 12/25/04 . chapter 1