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| Crying-Without-Tears 2008-01-07 ch 1,  | abuseaw i really like this one |
| Jackie (Paws) 2007-08-10 ch 1, anon. | abuseAw. Sweet stuff. If only it always held true. T.T "But some of those good friends I have no more One day we just stop talking And hanging around like before." I really liked that part, though it's sad, because it does happen in real life. And then, the pick-me-up, "I don't think it will fade. Out of all the friends I knew, I'm so glad that you stayed." Those are my favorite lines, especially the last one. It really creates the feeling of something special and eternal. "Stayed." That just really strikes a chord. That last line really seems akin to the line "I trust you," for some reason. You've got a knack for this real-life feelings poetry stuff. ^o^ Off to read some more. Jackie |
| Knightmage 2007-05-23 ch 1, | abusethat's a really sweet poem Knightmage |
| Alexis Albery 2006-11-18 ch 1, | abuseAw, that's really sweet. I can't imagine what I would say if my friend wrote something like that to me. Lovely job. |
| Atheneon 2006-11-11 ch 1, | abuseVery good. I could feel your lonelyness at first and then your warm fuzzyness at the end. You're very good at writing emotions into your work. |
| ignominy 2006-11-02 ch 1, | abusethe only reason i don't really get this is because i've grown up with two older sisters. i like the poem, it good really, but it doesn't connect with me i guess. thats not your fault though. i've read some poems like this but yours is original, in that you've found a friend you like more than a sister. |
| tadzendol 2006-09-11 ch 1, anon. | abuseHai. :) Sorry I didn't reply to your review sooner, I haven't been on the computer in a while. Great poem. Great poem. Just... The rhyming's a bit... I don't know... Weird. Good job though. i like it. taddy |
| Maranwe Telrunya 2006-09-02 ch 1, | abuseThe poem's meaning is so beautiful. I'm the only girl in my family, and my best friend is like a sister to me; this poem could apply to us. I love the meaning behind the words. However, the way you've worded the poem makes it sound like a bland paragraph chopped into poetry form. The word choices are so-so, and the sound of it is like a children's story. I don't mean to offend by saying that; I just want to be honest and not give you the false impression that there's nothing to be improved on. It has the potential of portraying a lot more emotion and also more of your lonliness and yearning for companionship. It would also help if there was more rhythm and rhyme; with the unflowery choices of words, rhythm and rhyme greatly improve the poem. Don't get me wrong; free flowing poetry is great, but only if it has a lot of drama and description. =D Maranwe Telrunya P.S. Thanks for your review on Shattered Glass Dreams =D |
| Glittering Innocence 2005-11-28 ch 1, | abuseWow! Amazing Poem! Thank you for reading my poem, now you can read my story! Please? I'm desperate! I'll put this poem in the fave stories and fave authors list? |
| blood thirst 33 2005-03-05 ch 1, | abusevery well written, thank you for reviewing |
| Shadows Fury 2005-02-06 ch 1, | abuse*Grins* thanks for the review's, there greatly appreciated. So, i was checking if you updated "Predators of the Night" *Sighs* which you haven't yet, *Glares* But I saw it's being edited. So, I came across this poem and thought, just...wow. It has a really nice flow to it and it's something I feel I can relate to. Yup, and lot's of emotion too. *Chuckles* and it rhymes.(Did I spell that right?) Anywho, I always have a hard time to doing that. All in all, a very well done poem if I do so say myself. Keep up the great work...and hurry up and edit Preadtors of the night! I won't to read the next chapter...Hehehe...no pressure, huh? Keep on writing. |
| Silentwriter9 2005-01-27 ch 1, | abusethis was wonderful. and i'm an only child too so i know what you mean. great job with this =). *Silent Writer* |
| empath89 2005-01-15 ch 1, | abuseaww, that's a really cute poem. i like it. and it's true about sisters. they're sometimes very annoying, but they're there for you when you need them. so it's great when people (you) have a friend that's as good as a sister. |
| Clau Delomre 2005-01-13 ch 1, | abuseHi, you asked me to reveiw, so I will ^^ It's a very nice poem, and I think you should keep at writting poetry, it was good and flowed well. I hope to read more from you ^-~~alice |
| RoQ 2004-12-25 ch 1, | abuseNice. |