very cryptic. i like it. very deep.

wow this is just wicked. I love the imagry.

hm the end sure is pretty (Crimson Tide).in blood is such a beautiful way to die.
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Great poem. Somewhat awkward flow. Perhaps you could work on the choppiness of the sentences, and more consistent punctuation. GREAT JOB!

nice poem! i like it lots

wow that is scarily gory and violent. and deep. i don't understand half of it...