A nice poem. Very angsty, emotional. It has good meaning. I really like this. It is quite good. Very good job, well done!

oh, i thought it was very good! lots of imagery, gives a sense of mystery^^ great job! keep writing~

Well what to say about this one.. I agree with you that Catharsis is better, but this one isn't bad either. I don't know why it's bugging you because I still like it, especially the Phoenix analogy. I love it.
Thanks for kindly reviewing my poem: Elf (or the departure of beauty) I'm glad you thought it was beautiful. I haven't read the Silmarillion actually, well not all of it. Still have a long way to go. Anyway Thanks!

Hi, thank you for your review! It really surprised me because I didn't expect to receive any. Just thought I'd pay back the favour and stumbled upon this poem of yours. I think we're going through a lot of the same things here. I especially like the line, "Is there a phoenix to rise from my ashes?" Great poem.
(P.S. As for my poem, I don't mean "the tame four walls" neither; it's a typo and should be "the same four walls." Sorry for the inconvenience. Now I have to figure out how to change it.)

Hey, Phoenix! In need of some feedback, huh? Well, I have some (when don't I?). :) This poem is interesting. I love the image of falling off of a mountain--very surreal. However, I wonder if maybe you could be a little more descriptive about your climb. It seems as though you climbed just a little bit and then fell to a dark doom far below. You mention climbing the mountain, but you never say that you reached the top--did you? Were you on top of the world only to fall to the bottom again? It sounds like that is the image you're trying to convey but you might want to make it clear that you did indeed make it. (This will make the falling more dramatic) Other than that, I loved this poem. It may not be as deep as your others but I think it does a wonderful job of explaining the frustration and hopelessness of failure. The phrases "Many-hued" and "Is ther a phoenix to rise from my ashes" didn't seem to flow as well but they did convey wonderful images. (its up to you to change them or not, its good as it is). I loved the line "The hell of my heart and the rack of my mind" it definitely shows your inner turmoil! Write more soon!
-Aillil

I actually quite enjoyed it, to some extent. You have some punctuation issues (I mean, you need some in many places), but otherwise I liked the language and the feel.

its good. very heavy, I'll admit. and not always understandable. but I think that poems that are confusing to other are really just about what people are feeling. which IS confusing to others. But still good.