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AzNDrEAmEr77 2004-12-11 ch 8,	abusewow jenny what the hell u put in some serious inside jokes with dust bunnies and stuff and i got a lito confuzzled..but seiorusly
Rednal29 2004-11-30 ch 8,	abuseAaw... The end already!? -.- Well, at least it was a good end.
purplemuffin 2004-11-25 ch 8,	abuseoie good, just a bit of truble w/ the point of view, i wish you had continued this longer :( its still so promising!
purplemuffin 2004-10-24 ch 7,	abusewell actually, when she and angel were fighting before, didnt angel kind of make an attempt one her life before?... and wait... when you say 'puddles moistening the otherwise arid sand. The water was already starting to freeze.' freeze? aren't they in the desert? or is it nite time? o ya it is... 'with young men that i fancied' hehe... fancied... sry just me being weird... and i dont think 'courtiers' is the rite term for 'boyfriend' wouldn't it just be like a 'courter' as in ur 'courting' someone? o i dunno... i just thought 'courtiers' were members of the 'court'... how many guys does louise like, o scarlet woman... lol jk, ok so the halls are leading to peoples minds? so the 'johanne' room was really his essence and everything that is HIS MIND... very interesting concept... OMG I JUST READ ANOTHER REVIEW AND THEN I REALIZED THE CHAPTER TITLE... LOUISE CAN READ MINDS! WOW IM SLOW... lol... that is awesome... i hope you dont mind this thorough and very long review but hey, its fun to get reviews, rite? and wouldn't you know it, its not letting me submit the darn thing... thank god for the rite click back button thing!
unthinkable 2004-10-24 ch 7,	abuseoh cool!! louise can read minds. please update soon!
AzNDrEAmEr77 2004-10-23 ch 7,	abusewowez cliff hanger, not bad, u could work on the way its written as we always complain about such stuff but i love the plot ~JEwLz~
Quid 2004-10-22 ch 7,	abuseHow INTERSTING! She can go into peoples minds? That means shes a psyche too! The plot is thicking. (that makes me think of soup) Write more!
Quid 2004-10-07 ch 6,	abuseINTERESTING! Good chapter. Maybe you would want a little less of a show of power yano? It was a bit much for all at once. Overload. But really good, keep writing!
AzNDrEAmEr77 2004-10-06 ch 6,	abusesry i guess i can't review on my laptop, but its hellyea good continue! n update fasta! ~JEwLz~
loneknight 2004-10-05 ch 6, anon.	abusebest story i ever erad write more
purplemuffin 2004-10-03 ch 6,	abuseand so the plot thickens... just caught a couple grammaticle errors... dont remember exactly where they are so just proofread a bit better or sumthin... this is getting more interesting only how come Louise and Johanne were beings so polite and proper, 'sir i apologize for causing you grief, i shouldnt have been so brash.' 'no its me who should be apologizing' its oddly dignified and i just thought it seemed a tad out of character... but w/e... pick up the pace on these chapters! must read more...
Starry Eyed Bunny 2004-09-13 ch 1,	abuseWOW! oO' Crazy story you got here! But I do like it very much! ^^' Please continue soon! heh I am wanting to read more... ( Y ) (o.o) (O O)o Bunny
Quid 2004-09-12 ch 5,	abuseLucas? Nice plot you're getting started in this chapter. Psyches. Kewl.
AzNDrEAmEr77 2004-09-12 ch 5,	abusemeh stupid clif hangers how did he get ova to some weirdo dessert? ya better update soon jenny u need ta update on epfbod also! teehee ~jewlz
purplemuffin 2004-09-12 ch 5,	abuseoie! this may be ur best chapter yet! i love the descriptions... yay... there were just those like two things which i pointed out to u already... and the lucas thing! o! write more asap! wait samantha's waving a swiffer mop at me! runn aaway!

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