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| l337 r0cX3r 2005-10-15 ch 1,  | abuseNice... It reminds me of Ray Bradburry in a way. How he sets you up, and makes you think that something is definitely going to happen, then does the exact opposite of what you thought was coming. Very cool. |
| Delsie 2005-06-29 ch 1, | abuseThe summary for this story already had me chuckling when I clicked the link. It quickly died at the serious mood set up by the opening of the story. However, those last two paragraphs were wonderful in their unexpectedness and left me laughing. I suppose I should've seen it coming, but you're artful set-up was perfect. On another note, I truly enjoy your descriptions. They're so thorough and complete, leaving me with no doubts about what the scene looks like. While a part of my imagination "hmph"s at the lack of work, the rest of my mind is thrilled to read your work. Once again, a marvelous story. Thank you for sharing it with us! ~Delsie |
| do not resuscitate 2004-09-27 ch 1, | abusei love the imagery created before the last two paragraphs, it was barren and stunning. the last two paragraphs caught me by surprise, but it was a good surprise. very original. |
| Pink Shadow 2004-07-16 ch 1, | abusethat was the spiff. Aww a bunny! I can't like...give this good criticism I just really liked it was so unlike anything i've ever read before. ::hugs:: way to go stupid chris -Stamber |
| RadioactiveSquirl 2004-07-15 ch 1, | abuseWonderful! Things aren't always as they appear. Great sturprise at the end. |