Reviews for The Malemalum Cult

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Balancing Act 2005-05-28 ch 10, anon.	abuseOkay, I changed my mind, the Darkness of the prophecy is that "evil black pig" of a griffin that Dem hates. Sadriana or whatever her name is will probably find some way to tame him.
Balancing Act 2005-05-28 ch 5, anon.	abuseFire and Darkness has to be the new griffin Firecloud and night, the full orb is the moon, basically Demenick has to get the girl sacrifice out of there on a griffin before the time of the sacrifice. Have to tell you, the prophecy wasn't that hard... But I definitely like the concept of the griffins, and the cult is an interesting turn.
A. Tieman 2005-04-10 ch 10,	abuseGood couple of chapters. Noticed a few errors that you should look at, like one two spelling and two punctuation. But other than that, job well done.
A. Tieman 2005-04-10 ch 7,	abuseGood chapter. Lots of explainations. Well done with not letting the reader get side-tracked while explaining the things about the reason of the cult and such and suck. Well done.
A. Tieman 2005-04-10 ch 6,	abuseGreat. Liked the argument. Showed something weird is going on in the cult. Showed a compassionate side of the main character. Well done.
A. Tieman 2005-04-10 ch 5,	abuseBrilliant chapter. Loved how you used the prophecy. Used just right to keep everyone clueless, yet it gives them clues on what's going to happen in later chapters. Well done.
Shiko87 2005-01-02 ch 1,	abuseHi,No, I haven't given up on Dark Fate-- I was going to read it and noticed this and, being a stupid humour fan, decided to give it a shot. It's definitely very funny. I like the way he talks about the cult in relation to his Dad's bad habits. Very funny. I'll be reading more of this. I love a good parody. Great job.
Cloud Burst 2004-12-27 ch 10,	abusegood chapter, though sorta plain.. get wat im saying? ur details r still exquisitely awesome! =]put in some action plz! ^-^
Marrianna 2004-12-18 ch 10,	abuseGreat chapter! I hope Demmick can run away to Jerrick and work with the griffins. I kinda feel like the story is dragging just a little though. Maybe pick up the pace just a tad and get in some action rather than just having Dem mope around trying to think of a plan. Please update quickly!! ~Enchanted Rose
Pico the Great 2004-12-14 ch 10,	abuseGrammar Goodies! Here you go, written as I read through: What? Wait, this first paragraph lost me a bit. It's the sentence fragment that does it: I think I see how the words are supposed to fit, but I still had to reread it a couple times before going on. No ' in griffins. "getting me to pet him where he’d rather be." Also awkward, mebbe add petted at end? "back up" Backed up? Came back up? Alright, no more grammar. Yay! You updated! I like this one, it's fun to read. I must admit, you're right about the griffin chappies being the most action-oriented; I did like the dialouges, though, in earlier chapters. The ones that were ...ones that were not among my favorites (not bad, but not so action/need work) were the ones where D is speaking with Greffit and his wife. Other than that; yeah, good stuff. So update soon! I curious! Kudos! -PTG
LordK 2004-12-13 ch 10,	abuseFinally caught up with this story too! Now just Dark Fate to go, right? Anyway, this was a wonderful chapter, as were all the rest I missed; I especially liked the last one. Sadriana's character was excellent. Very, very interesting and fun story. I really like what you're doing with the story, focusing on just how much this one event is changing Demenick while continuing to reveal more and more about who he already is. Very well written, and wonderful chapter as always.
LordK 2004-12-13 ch 9,	abuse*looks around guiltily as he has finally reviewed a part of this story. I'm SO behind... anyway, I just wanted to drop a note about this computer before I forget: In the fifth paragraph, when Demenick says "Probably not.", later "The answer was clearly never", is funny because it's very similar to "My answer was nearly clever". Sorry... I just thought that was funny.
Lost Inside 2004-12-09 ch 9, anon.	abuseIts good! Lost Inside
Faelan 2004-11-26 ch 9,	abuseRemember me? ^^ I got strangled by a massive writer's block (I couldn't write anything for at least two months!), and I haven't touched FP.com in all that time; however, now that I'm starting to get a wee bit creative again I decided to check up on my favorite story. And it's becoming so cute! I love the interaction between Sadriana and Dem. Also, the way Dem and his father converse is really interesting and gives the entire story a realistic feel. Too often characters are too 'high and mighty' for normal emotions, and that bugs me. Great job! Keep up the great work!
layby-cougar 2004-11-24 ch 7,	abusehey, interesting story! Your plot is very original, and the dialogue is good! Please write more. I will finish reading when my eyes have stopped hurting :)- Carmen

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