i like it, it's good. a lot of emotions.
haz almighty

Awesome. This one is one of my favorites! Great job!

The lyrics are a little rough in places, but overall this is very well-written. I like it, and I wish I could write songs as well as this.

Dude! This was friggin AWESOME! I LOVE IT! ahh lol ^-^
-Skye

You contradict yourself. If 'parents control you' and 'give you morals and sight' then that goes against the responsibility and individuality you're espousing. Besides that, the repetition in every other stanza is sometimes effective, though sometimes it is too clumsy for the rest of the poem, which has a swift, light tone to it.