Not bad, not bad. I'm probably being biast because it's based on Joy Divsion's song and I effin love them to death lol but anyway I can almost hear what htis could sound like, as you explained and I hope maybe some day to hear it _ and don't listen to what that other bastard said, lol whatta retard.. ah, but good job!
Jenna xoxo

FAG MUSLIM I WILL SHOOT YOU IN THE JUICY FACE OF YOUR COCK AND GUZZLE THE BLOOD. I HAYTE YOU SO FUCKING MUCH, YOU HAVE NO FRIENDS.
I'm sorry to say but this poem is so bad... I don't think you have a poetic side. Maybe you should learn from me. I am a very good poet you are not. What a loser you are loser.

eek...depressing...
good though.