I love it. Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.
Sasa

that was really good:) i can't help imagining a m/m pairing but that's just me. i like the way you kept it kinda' English dilougue wise.
in fact there are lots of good points i could mention, but i guess that would defeat the point of improvement via critique.
ah hell, i like it and i can't see any flaws.
go you.

you describe the kiss very well. i enjoyed the story but i always enjoy yout stuff so its to be expected

I liked that.

I like it!
It was really sweet! :)
Aw... left me wanting a kiss! xD
I'm always reading M/M fics so... my mind instantly tell me that they were two guys :S
But well, I like your writing!
GREAT!
:D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D