Its a little confusing, but i suppse that things will even out later on.

There are a few spots where you used present tense instead of past, but i still do that at times. I don't realize it until somone alse points it out.

The begining of this chapter seems like a prolgue in itself. Maybe you could add it on to your default chapter or add something to make teh transition into dialogue a little smoother.

Good job tho, its sounds interesting, so update soon!