While this piece may be of the shorter varity, it is highly effective. The various emotions it carries with it were easily comprehended. The wording, while seeming simple, is artfully woven to give a wonderful effect. I also liked the repetition of the "four thousand miles" from the first stanza into the last.

The only advice I can think to give on this piece would be to consider adding more punctuation. The poem is perfectly fine as it is. However, you might experiment with punctation to see how it changes the rhythm and, as it does in some cases, the way the poem is read. Though, as I already said, it doesn't actually *need* it. It was just a thought.

Thank you for sharing your work with us. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.

~Delsie