Personally, I don't like it. The rhythm seems forced, very forced. The lines don't follow any particular pattern of syllables, and the message (Good versus evil, or evil versus good, who's who blah blah blah) had been done so many times before that it isn't funny.

Kudos for not writing about yourself, though.

I like the rhythm and meaning of it, but I don't really like the references to Harry Potter and Lord of the Rings. I think you could've done without "In Lord of the Rings,/The east is defeated by the west./In Harry Potter,/Voldermort`s been beaten in battle by the good."

I liked it especially since you metioned the west. Post more something stories soon.

brilliant, very good point, i loved it