Some times you hit the pain of a guy and the thoughts of a guy dead on in this. I was very shocked by that. Whats funny is when the characters talk the story goes down. I wish i got to know the characters alot more b4 it ended- cuz it would have been sadder.

Wow... that was unexpected... but the story ish still good. I think I'm gonna read it again.. I should print dis up... ~~;

UGH! WHY?! Me so sad! I so wanted then together, but it was a nice twist. You know who this is...I was just too lazy to login...
~`~`~Amelia~`~`~

Someone stops him huh? I kinda guessed since you cut off there. This is a good story from a guy's point of view. I really enjoy it.

DANG!! WUT A CLIFFHANGER! WHEN'S THE NEXT CHAPTER COMING OUT?! *gotta kno, gotta kno* !

The story's really good so far. I really need to know what happens.

*ish waiting for the next ch* - -l
yea.. its that good.. XD...

Wow, that was an intense story, and I could really feel his pain. He sounds like he's bordering on being mental, and I wonder how you'll take this story.

Wow that dream sequence was afully (sorry for the spelling) familiar...
~`~`~Amelia~`~`~

Very interesting, can't wait for the next ch.

This is a really sad story...is it gonna get happier later? It's depressing me a little. I can't help you with the POV of the guy. But I think you're doing a pretty good job so far. Maybe a little drinking or something...I dunno. Most of the guys that I know, drink and smoke a lot when their angry or I guess depressed.
I'm a little confused in some parts...I'm sorry if it's obvious but I am not a very observant person. I can be little clueless sometimes. Who is Ashley anyway? I mean, are they roommates or something? And when did she tell him she didn't love him?
Anyways, I think you did a good job. Keep it up!

So, you decided to write a story! I like it, much better than mine. >.

This is good. Will there be more?
~Amelia...like the name change?