Hm... Interesting. Is it just me or do I detect in you a faint affinity for secret societies? Hunters, Peacekeepers, Knights Traystar. Pretty good story.

Wraith/Walker

And the plot thickens! I likes! Can't wait for chapter 4! Ja!
~pont

Wow, nice! Canine's cool, Kim's hotheaded, and Prophet's... mean. ^_^
Great job on character development this chapter! I likes a lot. Your charactes complement each other very well. Can't wait to see how this goes, keep up the great work!
~Pont

Ew :P Your characters are always so col! Nice start, definitely gives off a creepy, dangerous feeling. This story's a hooker!
Only little thing (and it really isn't that big of a deal) is where you say '...his irises suddenly dilating as the bullet exited through the other side.' I just thought you might want to put in a noun to complement 'through', like 'the other side of his skull' or something like that. But really, you don't have to listen to me. You make me sound like an amateur after all ^_^
Keep up the great work!
~Pont

Nice, but too damned short. I like the description of the killer, though. Incidentally, the red tie has some religious significance in the Catholic Church; a red tie is supposed to be worn during First Communion to ward off the devil.

Don't know how I know that, considering the last time I went to church...:)

~He Who Walks On All Fours

Good start. A little short though. Lack of plot detail and shortness make it kinda hard to judge the story, but I suppose the lack of info was for suspense. Nice job.