Hey I like it a lot. Its really good. Although you do know that the title is also used for the Hobit? It doesn't matter. I was just wondering.

Les Bonne Temps Rouler!

S.D.

uh... I like it better when you don't rhyme. but it was still good. Thumbs up!

Nope! It didn't suck at all! I liked this one, too. It's beautiful as you expressed the dilemma of the main character very well, and I like your idea on "the land of black and the land of white". It really shows the contrast of the beauty of Paradise and the vile world of Earth. Anyway, I loved how you let Love bring the main character back to Earth, because it's true that maybe Love can make even the world seem beautiful. So... congrats on finishing another wonderful poem!

~Kaze of the Sand (I'm afraid that I'll only post a review for Luna Chaos tomorrow or the day after tomorrow, because I can't read it today, though I'm dying to read it. So... I'll be reading! ^_^)

Not too shabby. :) I love the emotion, and the fact I can relate. Now could you imagine no one calling you back instead? Ah, young love. :) You lucky thing you.

Some of the lines seemed a bit cliche with phrases I'm sure everyone has heard at least once, but it brought a feeling of, I suppose, homeliness. It makes the reader feel more intune with the writer, which is always a good thing. Overall, I was very pleased with this poem. Great job.

One question: How do you keep your stanzas? Fictionpress just crams mine together. :(

Hello. It kind of like it but you may need some work.
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Dis is Benjo. Hehe! Im folowing wat you said.