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| ezilyconfused 2004-07-21 ch 1,  | abusegreat poem... i'm glad you didn't do it.. |
| Eirien 2004-07-21 ch 1, | abuseShort but really effective. The detailed descriptions of each step of the speaker's action as well as the adjectives such as "slick" and "sweaty" make it really vivid and all a lot to the impact. Those who know the effort involved in the struggle you describe read this with breathless suspense. Good job. |