O_o Quite a chilling tale. Not bad for just a whim. I'm impressed, as usual. This story could have gone a thousand ways and spawned a thousand more. Your description and use of sensory details is amazing! What talent...great work.

Wes

I would love to see if you wounld add to this story. It seems like a good place to start a wonderful story.

Wow, my Kitsune, you DO have some awesome writing talent. As I sat here reading this, I was just completely awed at Cyric, who seems to me to be a really awesome, slighlty ruthless character. I love how you developed on him, making him seem like the cold, emotionless warrior (save for a little maliciousness) and yet at the end there was a twist--^^;; He's lonely.

I'm not too sure what to say about this, other than I was just amazed. I guess I underestimated your malevolence by just a little. Ano...Cyric was a bit ruthless, ne? But then again, I was expected that (after I started reading the story >>) becuase of the particular situation he was in.

Blood Mage...creative yet classic. I like the idea of it. And Blood Dragon of the Lords. Ah, now doesn't he seem like the perfect little cutie to send soul reaping? (And what was with the charm "Rape of the Soul?" I was like O.O ano...that's an um...intersting name for that...um...yeah. Scared now.)

Kudos to me for a long review, I guess. Hopefully you like them when they're long. ^_- I so worded that wrong. But I don't feel like changing it now cause it made me giggle. ^_^;; Hehe.

Aishiteru watashi no kistune!

(I love you, my fox...as if you didn't already know that by now tho! ^-)

Love you,

Your Neko

AW! NEED TO WRITE MORE

That was really good!! Will there be any more?

somewhat confusing, you need to make certain it's understood who's doing what. the introduction is to set up a foundation for your story, this one's too shabby to be a foundation.
otherwise, very nice. nice description and the plot has potential, although a bit clichéd...