Ohh interesting...i like this poem, it reminds me of one of mine, the ending of my Excuses poem if i remember correctly...

Wow. Awesome! I love it. It's so tragic. I love the way you set up your poems. It's cool. I like the 'dry, dry and opened' part the most. I like this poem a lot.

Hmm ... not bad, the ideas are there. You should attempt strengthening your words and your poetry ...
keltica