i think its brilliant...and its ok that its unstructured and unedited...it has a raw feel to it that i like...and i can relate to it so much, its freaky!very nice!keep up the great work!

i'm totally lyk it! its just the same lyk i felt and yeah probably i just love it..

powerful.

i REALLY like this one. i can definitely relate to it. nice work and keep it up!

it was great.. yeah.. spur of the moment..
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often spur of the moment poems are the best because they reveal how you really feel. That's the only way I'll do poems. Your feelings come across very clear here and it's a powerful bit... it almost writes like it could be a song. I like it.
cheers :)

That was pretty good for just spur of the moment. I know how that feels to and its not a good feeling.