Great use of dialogue. It really helped to pull the reader in. It was extremely realistic. You obviously know a lot about being a freshman on the football team! One of my favorite parts is "he had no clean street clothes". It shows you are really in the mind of your character and help the reader to identify with the situation. I want you to finish this one...what is going to happen!?!?! ...BTW Bye Bye Latyde is another one of my personal favorites of yours!! I'll review that one next week=).Jules