wow sweet, death very intereting ohh i want more now :( *looks at story summary* tis not a one-shot at least you didnt say soo... more chapters soon please!

Wow that was...different. Very cool, but also very different. I hope you post more soon.

That was really good. It would even be greater if you decided to make into a full-length story. Great Job! ^_^
~*~Andrea Araujo~*~

This is very interesting! It sort of gave me inspiration, thank you lol. Good job with the writing, by the way. You used detail!

i like it! ^_^ my suggestion is to use some more shorter sentences. I know, it's hard! -_- but it'll help your story a lot!
~Nightly Rain