"Im shaken back to place..." This line stood out. I liked this...

i liked it. i liked the last stanza, it was my favorite mostly because it flowed really well in my mind. i also liked the rhyme scheme. way to be
~Mack and Ty

the last two stanzas of this were amazingly intense. really fantastic imagery, and once again, great cadance.

I like it a lot, it's a good piece. R&R mine?