greatness. I think ya should leave it as a 1-shot. it's so ethereal, so full of fantasy... wow

Wow... that was very cool... It would be an interesting story. I got a little confused until you told us the stuff about them doing different things at the same time. Creative and funful!
Ku

weird but good

Wow, this is so amazing, love the description! More more more!! You should definitely continue!
A few things:
p2: I think you mean ”fancifully shaped”.
p10: ”attesting to the magic of its (no ‘) wearer.” The third sentence has two “delicate”s close together. Also, the clouds should be “obscuring them”, not “obscure”.
This is cool! I want to see why the Great Priestess was calling Lauriel, who she is, etc.