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| PearlinTheMist 2005-08-14 ch 1, anon. | abusegreatness. I think ya should leave it as a 1-shot. it's so ethereal, so full of fantasy... wow |
| Kuiya 2004-09-01 ch 1,  | abuseWow... that was very cool... It would be an interesting story. I got a little confused until you told us the stuff about them doing different things at the same time. Creative and funful! Ku |
| Frank the Turkey 2004-08-10 ch 1, anon. | abuseweird but good |
| Earthsong12 2004-08-01 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is so amazing, love the description! More more more!! You should definitely continue! A few things: p2: I think you mean ”fancifully shaped”. p10: ”attesting to the magic of its (no ‘) wearer.” The third sentence has two “delicate”s close together. Also, the clouds should be “obscuring them”, not “obscure”. This is cool! I want to see why the Great Priestess was calling Lauriel, who she is, etc. |