Sounds like the speaker is getting pushed to be perfect just like all the males in his family, up to his great grandfather. I like how his poem moves at a quick pace and the lines 'Just maybe.../Perfection isn't perfect/Anymore' really leave you with a feeling and a moral understanding of the piece. Good job.
Thanks for your input on 'Gost' btw. I will tweak that last chapter quite a bit...it's what I get for writing it in the wee hours of the moring.

I like how you have to think a bit more to understand the poem! great job!

oh dud that was cool. I especially like the last four lines.

i luv the last paragraph ^.^

Wow this is really good, I don't know if I really get the meaning so I'm not going to pretend I do, but its still good rhyming. I too am a sketch artist but I write lyrics for my band. Please read and review my work as well.

This is a great poem. It is quite fast, but isn't that the good effect of this poem? Isn't this poem about rushing into perfection and not really realising that perfection isn't everything? Blah! Forget that, it's a great poem.