I really like this one... great job... I loved the very last part:
'Can't you see, can't you
That everything I've done, I've said
Has been out of love for you?'
That really spoke to my heart. Keep it up, I can't wait to read more of your poems as soon as I have time.

I get a very evanescency feel...kind of like "Haunted"...really good to me then, good job...liked this a lot.

i like this. well expressed.

Wow. Very powerful poem, with powerful imagery. Incredible :)