It's lovely... but there is also a sense of futility that leaves the beauty entangled with sorrow. I LOVE your rhyme. Normally I dislike rhyming poetry, but you wrote it perfectly so that it is are not remotely trite. Very nice.

What an interesting piece! I absolutely love it. Vry unique descriptions and idea... Well done. Bravo!

IHavePizza, this is a really great poem. Its soo, I don't know, meaningful. Keep writing. By the way, plez read my story Broken Hearts Are Forever. Its my first story.