Aw, man! Keep it going! I love the idea behind this already-- there's character development in the opening few sentences, which I'm just devouring with glee. Keep it going! I'm interested as all hell as to where this'll lead, so keep it going! I'd love to read more.

Thanks for the review! I like your story. Kind of creepy...keep going!

This is an interesting piece.
It feels almost as though this is preceding a story...?
As a reader, I feel like there is much more behind this passage. It leaves me with a lot of questions.