Hey pretty interesting story. I liked it.
I do have something to say to you though I would e-mail you but my e-mail is being stupid and wont let me in, I think my sister changed the pass word because she hates me so I have to say it here. You reveiwed my story without reading it and told me a few things that I would like to set you sraight on. First Sonrisas is a parallel story to my sister's story Lagrimas, same chareters different point of veiw. And indifinte is the word we were looking for we didn't want to use forever. And last I have to say it's very rude to reviwe a story with out reading it. If you had read it you would have understood these things. As you can see I read you story first and it was pretty good, but you summary wasn't.

very well written, and I'm intrigued by what you have set up for the plot. looking forward to more.