 raven-birdie 2004-08-24 . chapter 1My guess is that the gift's a smile. :)
Nice narrative poem. I like the story that it portrays. It carries a true message to it to, how a gift from someone you don't even know can change your life for the better even if ya don't realize it.
One thing though. You may want to work on your diction a lil bit. It rhymes only sometimes and the rhymes are a bit well, juvenile? Other than that though, good job. |