This is surprisingly beautiful and dark.

woaa this poem is great! I especially love how you used to the fruit, tres interessant ( very interessting) ! There are scarce words yet you chose the right ones and are able to get your point across, well done, well done!

PS. Thanks for reviewing my stuffz i appreciated it!

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That's cool. I got a new poem up (Dancin' In The Rain), care to check it out. WOnderful job!

i love the question you ask...makes it very exciting

from bible study, i know what this is about, and i think you portrayed it very well. keep writing 0)

I love the metaphors... and how you put 3 lines inbetween the yous.. nicely written!

I've never found anyone who looked at the story of original sin this way before. I am intrigued. This was very well written, and I applaude you on this piece of work. Very nice job.

I see the hands of your clock strumming away at the strings of my heart.
- I love that line, its filled with so much imagry. Great poem.
Juliet.