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| happy thing 2005-07-29 ch 1,  | abuseOh my, this has some really good things giong for it. The irony of thispoem has a really great effect. It's a lullaby, yet you're talking about all of these hirrible things. Wonderful wonderful. Also, very crafty ending. Nice touch. Well done. |
| Flavor of Rain 2004-08-07 ch 1, | abuseI loved this poem, it's true many worries a parent must have when raising a child in times like these. Wonderful, a little down, but it's a good, well written poem. |
| WriterOfDragons 2004-08-05 ch 1, | abuseAmen to that i beleive in that. it's so true don't ever soften do not yeild to others cause from what i have read you have a blunt honest type of writing that i would love to have. much luv, WriterofDragons! |
| Mormon Princess 1 2004-08-03 ch 1, | abuseThis is really amazing and really cute. Not to mention the fact that it is very well written! |
| Eboniccinderella 2004-08-02 ch 1, | abuseMy gosh that was deep.That is excellent. |
| Death by Night 2004-08-02 ch 1, | abuseWell done. *applauds briefly* I give you props for not sugarcoating things and making the world seem sugary sweet like most lullabies do. Thanks for that one. |
| Make me with Beautiful Line... 2004-08-01 ch 1, | abusei like this cuz it is very...true in a sense. it is a little creepy cuz of the kiling thing, but touching cuz u care. i really like how you showed the emotion. it is good. |
| giggles for boys 2004-07-31 ch 1, | abusehey, I have a poem too about children losing their innocence. It's called, "Fade" if you'd like to read it. But anyway, your poem was wonderful. I liked how you wrapped up the poem with "stay asleep as long as you can". keep up the great work |
| eyluvmusic 2004-07-31 ch 1, | abuseAw, this is soo so sweet. I love it. WELL DONE |