Reviews for September 11th essay

Reviews For: September 11th essay

Twilit Exaggerance 2004-12-01 ch 1,	abusethis is well wrote. I wrote something similar, but I placed my friends in America when it happened. I sympathise, and the effect it had on the whole world, but it didn't really touch me either.
Rudolph2 2004-08-01 ch 1,	abuseWhen you're writing an essay, particuraly for high school classes and above, try not to use abbreviations like "t.v."; spell out the word. Do not substitute words with numerical symbols. Also, avoid using several conjunctions. It's supposed to read out as formal and unrushed. Some of the words you chose to depict how you felt fell completely short of provoking any emotion that would help relate readers to what you are saying. Surely when you saw thousands being blown up (or flung out a window) you had to have posessed more insightful feelings than what you portrayed. Why I'm giving you this many tips is because you mentioned this was written for "skool". My guess is that tenth grade and beyond, they won't be so lenient to poor writing. My greatest suggestion to you is that you research exactly how to write a formal paper if you haven't already.
arwen-evenstar89 2004-08-01 ch 1,	abusegreat job! You had a few grammar mistakes, but this essay was different than many you see about September 11th!
theworldisround 2004-08-01 ch 1,	abuseYou need to fix the spelling and punctuation in this. My friend's birthday is on September 11th, and that girl on The Real World: Chicago had her birthday on September 11th too. It's actually very common. I don't think essays can capture the feeling that day gave us all. Maybe a documentary?
C Shot 2004-08-01 ch 1,	abuseMy cousin, friend and little brother all have their birthday on Sept 11th. So dont think your sister is alone, but I find your 'sadness' way out of line. Likewise I've seen four year olds write with better grammar then you. -Curtis

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