I wrote the review for ch 25 first, just one additional comment to that. Maybe I missed it, as it's been a long time since the story started, but was Kowalski mentioned earlier? It just seemed a bit sudden when he appeared in the last chapter and provided a solution. Perhaps you could weave him into the story somewhere so he doesn't appear as a deus ex machina. He's a good character though.

Well, what can I say? The story continued to grow and kept me enthralled for the whole 25 chapters. The epilogue was, I think, your finest piece of writing. I'm glad to see a happy ending after the trauma of the last few chapters. Great work.

What a wonderful ending. A couple of typos in this last "chapter", but that's all.

This is one great story. When I have more time I have to read more of it. But it's gonna go on my favourite story list so thank you so much for making such an entertaining first POV story.

I love this line, it's so amusing: "Ok, so going up against a guy twice my size, and evidently more powerful, is not the smartest thing I could do. But the guy has spent the last half hour gutting the centre of Brighton, and doesn’t show any sign of stopping anytime soon."

Wow, great story... think there will be a sequell to it? i just cant believe you set up a whole world with baddies and good guys almost at war and then just leave it at that.

Golly, gee, and to think I thought Charlotte was good to begin with. Man, did she pull the wool over his head.

woohoo! Keep it coming!

I haven't gotten to that point yet myself, so I'm sorry, but I can't suggest any. Have you ever heard of the book, "Idiot's guide to getting published"? It has a lot of good advice on how to send a book to an editor. Another good chapter!

Yay! You updated! Great chapter. By book form, I mean why isn't this in print with a front and back cover?

Hm, and I thought getting to the moon would be some kind of resolution. Any chance you can type faster?

WOW...great, awesome story. I've thoroughly enjoyed all 17 chapters of this story...Question 1, why isn't this in book form? Question 2, up date it please?

Your story is very creative. Nathan is pretty well developed as well as Ren. He definately keeps your attention and it was cool that he doesn't care about level as much as some, he is happy with what he had, and now... Definately curious to see where you'll take him. Otherwise, you should definately try and get a beta or proof reader, your story has some errors, and doesn't flow all the time, I would hae to reread a sentence or two. But otherwise can't wait for an update!

Good chapter, kinda short for my liking, but still good. I apologize if I seemed...well, stupid. I didn't mean to. Well, keep it up and try not to take so long updating, I love this story.

Just keeps getting bigger and better.

Good story. I'm probably gonna be checking every day to see if you've updated this story. One of the best ones I've read in a while. Every story I've read on this site, only 3, are so good. I've been considering writing a story, but I don't know if I'm at this caliber of writing. My stories are good, but one problem I have is chapter length. My chapters are usually just 3 or 4 pages long while other chapters are 9 or 10. Well, anyways the only thing I need to tell you about is spelling. There're just a few mistakes and they're normal mistakes. For example, in one of the chapters you write 'privet' instead of 'private'. And also you being from Europe and me from America probably has something to do with it. (I could tell by your spelling) Well, keep it up.