I figured since you took time out of your busy schedule to help me out so I decided to read this fic. Nice start... It was short, sweet and straight to the point. Revealing enough to get me interested but leaving a lot to mystery, which makes me inclined to read on. Good chapter man, I'll read on when i get a chance. Hope i can write even half as good as you.

Whee, it looks like I'm going to be your fifty-eth review (fifty-eth is a word but, meh, let's pretend it is). I'm going to have to stop at this review, but I'll try reviewing more once I have more time and I don't have troublesome schoolwork. Anyway, great chapter, as always, and I found myself laughing at some parts, because there were some humorous elements as well, which I think is another thing that you've mastered in this story. I also think that it's funny that the demon always speaks in capital letters LIKE THIS. And the magical incantations from Kuro is pretty cool. I could perfectly visualize that moment, and it was totally awesome. Hoho, we've got some blood in this as well. You're very good in the art of blood ^_^ I simply can't wait to see what happens next, because this story is extremely compelling and has wonderful characters that live out dramas and comedies with equal ease. Very, very well-written. I shall read more in the future, and I will forever enjoy your talented pieces.

chibichocobo

It is what dreamers call reality and what realists call delusion. An unbalanced equation where all definition fails.

Well, another great chapter, with an element of suspense in it as well. I can't wait to see what's going to happen next. Whew, it looks like I've got a lot of catching up to do, though I'm not complaining about it ^_^ This is a great story, and the different characters react wonderfully with one another. Hm, it looks like they had to face a demon monster named Gordo. Very interesting indeed. I always like demons inside stories, because, well, they make the story more interesting, though I think that this story is interesting enough as it is ^_^ However, you continue to dazzle me with your storytelling, and the story only gets better and better when I at first thought that it couldn't. There was a lot of dialogue here, but the dialogue was so well written that there was no need for description in the first place, and for that, I tip my hat to you, mainly because that's a hard skill to acquire. Anyway, I shall go on to the next exciting installment of the story!

chibichocobo

You've definitely got an interesting roster of characters coming along, and as far as I'm concerned, I believe that this would make a great manga. The one thing about your story though that makes it seamless is that wonderful flow from different transitions, and of course, a good writing voice to entrance the reader with. This time, we witness action here, which is well done and can be perfectly visualized as an exciting anime fight. Within a few short words, you manage to convey a whole picture, which is something I really can't do ^_^ This was a great chapter, and ah, I can't think of anymore compliments to say about the greatness of this fic, because I've enjoyed it way too much to be healthy ^_^

chibichocobo

I decided to read over this again and review chapter by chapter (I've already reviewed chapter 2 and 3, though, I think). But anyway, to tell you about the storytelling, I'd have to say that this is very effective, and it definitely feels like one of those wonderful fantasy mangas that will grab you by the throat and never let go until the very end. I like the mythological aspect from the very beginning, because it was so well written and extremely convincing, and of course, breathtaking in its overall performance, which gives the story an overall feel about what's to come. The storytelling and transition from the legend to the present time, which is a trademark skill of a talented writer. This had a dramatic beginning, and it leaves the reader wanting more to read. I like the overall presentation of this piece, mainly because it's so wonderfully written and it definitely has the manga element to it. Very good.

chibichocobo

Hey, I just thought I would tell you, we are almost done mapping out our own Manga. If you wouldn't mind checking it out on our Bio Page that would be great. It should be up by late tonight or tomorrow at some point. We hope that you will read it.Never Doubt The Ones Who Understand,When You Do Not

I will have to say that that is my favorite battle yet. keep writing

And so, chappie 12 ends! BUT, will they find the Omni Mage!? I'll have to read 13! Oh, and, I'm gonna look back at the previous chapters to see if I can see any of your hints.

I am appalled at how well written this story is. You can just see all the characters in your mind and you also see the towns and everthing. You are an accomplished writer. The demons you created are just very original. Your story is also entertaining as well. You take the two things that are most necessary for a good story, and combine them together, 1. Well written plot. Without that no story can go anywhere, and 2. Belivable characters, all your characters are belivable, none of them has some, all powerful ability, they have their great strengths, yet they also have weaknesses. I commend you on a very well written plot and hope to see more in the Future.Never Doubt Those Who Understand,When You Do Not

Sdrive: Wow, very well written. I was wondering when Denku was going to finally transform. I must say, the demons you made were all very creative. And you did a GREAT job describing them, it was as if I could actually picture them. Very nice job. Please continue this soon.Power to the Hikari's

Another awesome battle, Peace Wrtier! You have the know how when it comes to battles! And the story line is excellent! Continue writing!

This looks very interesting. I feel bad for Kasara. Vanten sounds like a real **. I hope to see more of this in the future past chapter 13 which I will read when I get more time. Please keep up the hard work.Never Doubt The Ones Who Understand,When You Do Not.

Sdrive: Ok, so I'm playing the ketchup game. This is where I Catch Up to where I had left off. Very good. I hope you keep going and look forward to seeing more from you. As always,Power to the Hikari's

Well, what do i want to say. Yes indeed, that was quite a big hole you left there. After all, bones in those area's take a least a month to fix. Though the arm would take a year to fix completly. And probably wouldn't set right in their enviroment. Otherwise, not bad. I'm stll liking.

Seishinbyo Suku Zan

Really... long... fight scene with really... annoying... demon...

He needed to die faster.