Would of been nice if you didn't steal my work from my school folder. I will admit my work is good but i would atleast want to be asked if you could use half of my work. Thank you

Sounds like your story is off to a good start. =) Keep on writing! I'd like to read more. =)

Sounds interesting so far, but there are a few grammatical things to work out. You've let a lot of the characters past and story details out in the first chapter, so I'll expect you'll be talking about other things in later chapters. Good luck.