This is good Red. Adventurous and humorous, nice!

What?! No!! This definitely has promise. I think you need to write/role-play more... PLEASE?!?! I like the humor Kyokai brings to the story, and Yasu's a little...odd...And I wanna know more about the other guys...esp. what the assassin has planned! Please update this!

very nice red! I was wondering what you were working on, seeing as though u havn't updated Lady of Akai lately. I like. Please keep writing! hm... i'm hungry...

Piccolo: *inches away slowly*

*takes a bite out of piccolo (yet again), spits out* EW! PICKLES!

LOL see you! ~Kemi

the idea of tha characters contrasting personalities coming together is good keep it up, review mine aswell please (its called Children of the atom)

I'm surprised that this was written by such a large number of authors! The story flowed very well; if I hadn't been informed, I wouldn't have known, that's for sure. This is a really cute first chapter, in a great way; the hyperactive fighting moments were wonderful, and your characters all have a lot of spunk and personality; the pace is frantic, but I love it! Nice foreshadowing, there at the end. There were some pleasant surprises in this chapter, and I hope you (all) continue to deliver in the next chapters. Keep writing!

You're all pretty talented. This seems to have an interesting cast of characters in it, and I liked the writing style as well. Keep up the good work, all of you. Hasta luego.
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