Like I told you Ms. I gave Pikachu a rash, I read the first chapter...and I liked it all four times I've read it. This is an excellent peice of art in written form. You capture the essense of the the characters you created and let them flow across the page. I look forward to reading the final three installments of this excellent story. I just wish I could tell what...nevermind...

Sorry about my late review, but better late than never? ^^; Anyway, I'm still really curious about what's going on here and I'd like to read on. I like your style of writing, especially how you described the house and the passing seasons and how all of the children were treated and related to each other - it seemed really real with all the detail. I also liked how you got into the boy's head, and his desperation at being left behind etc. And yeah, I'm also wondering about his pyromaniac tendencies, but I guess I should be patient and wait to discover how everything links together, right?

aw poor Daemon and his twisted life. Thanatos and Daemon should get together and write a book about the horrors of abusive acholic mothers. And then all will be well. This chapter was a good one, but who is it about? Starr?

Whoa creepy. Creepy, creepy, creepy. I really like the perspective on this. You really sound like a crazy person. A little gory, but I can see that that was part of the story.
BTW, thanks for reviewing my friend starflames. I R&R anyone who reviews me or my friends, which is how I found you, so thanks.

My dear, Kuro...you are a glorious creature! I have never read anything quite so gruesome and yet so sensual.
I'm also a little embarrassed to admit that I've become a tad bit infatuated with your characters, Daemon and Yume. They really are sweet boys. I wish you happy writing and I hope to read your third chapter soon.

Interesting. I still like how there's no censor on the way you write your violence, because it makes the story all the more gory and meaningful. It's also weird how I'm starting to sympathise with Daemon even though he seems to have unhealthy desire to crush everyone who speaks to him. I think that Yume's the most interesting character so far, whether or not he really exists. I had the idea that Yume was actually inside Daemon's body, and that in more-or-less pulverising Daemon he was actually forcing him to hurt himself. But it was interesting that the little girl actually seemed to see the demon as another physical body attacking him, so I'm curious about that. And of course Starr is another curious character, and how he knows about Yume and Daemon. I wonder where this story's going to go from here. Anyway, interesting beginning - keep it up ^^

Sorry for the delayed review ^^; Anyway, I can honestly say that this is one of the most vivid pieces of writing that I've ever read - and no, I can't believe that you were eating while reading this, lol. I don't feel like eating for a while now ^^; But this was definitely a very interesting and intriguing piece of writing. I love the brutal descriptions because it immerses the reader completely in the violence and brutality of the situation, and your style of writing is very interesting too. I like how you've explained enough so that I get a sense of what's happening, but not the full picture, and what I have learnt is pretty disturbing. I wonder where you're gonna go with this, because if Daemon isn't dead then I'm not sure that I wanna know what's left of him after that!

Well great job again my freind, though I basically glanced at, but what I read was good! You better up date soon Chara-chan!! hahahaha I called by your real name!
~me

Hey...I know that you probably don't want me reading your stuff, because you hate me. But I thought it was grand. Keep it up.

Hello:
This was impressive. One of the better stories I've recently read. I love the disturbing scenes and how there was so much blood... the multiple identities is a unique aspect. I hope you continue this soon.

Wow, this is great, I think that this is one of the best stories I've read in a while, I love how gory and disturbing it all is. Please review soon.