this is really good! :) i like how its sort of contradicting, and i can feel the confusion the speaker (writer) is attempting to display. and how she's trying to find his flaws among his perfection, something that many of us do when checking out a new guy for date-worthy-ness...haha. anyways, i really enjoyed it :)

Aww that was brilliant. I love that one.
I've also just read your bio and you're a LOTr fan hehe yay. But more to the point you're a Legolas fan. wooho!
Do you write any LOTR fanfic? I'd love to read it if you did. I do, if you're interested. It's on fanfic under LegyLuva.
Well done on your poem.
Sugar

Very good. It's hard for a lot of people to keep up a rhyme scheme and still keep everything flowing. Nicely done. Good portrayal of emotions too. Keep up the good work! :)

I really like this, you have a crazy modern way of writing and the reader can literally hear a voice reading the words to them. Great job. Keep up the good work.