Reminds me of pirates and wars that are better left un-fought because they are a waste of time.

Just my initial thoughts. I thought this was very well written though. Dark and yet you could feel tossed in the emotions. Dramatically done.

Bravo

I like this poem and i love the imagrey, u might like some of my stuff, are u up north, south or in the middle(east coast) Im Middle! And in a very boring state!

Awesome. Wish I could say something constructive. Actually, I can: Write more. ^_^

i nearly drowned once, a summer ago, but there was no blood involved, thank goodness. very interesting poem, a slight bit short, but otherwise fantastic. great job.

very nice peice it is short maybe you could add on it wouldn't be to bad i don't know your choice

I like it! It really does bring out the fear of drowning and has wonderful imagry! Well done!

very grafic, adn i mean that in a good way. It not only prtrays the feeling of desperation but the actual fear of drowning.
-Ebony