 muhahahaha 2005-04-07 . chapter 1 i read it! i Read it, i read it! in class, and THE peoples were all up ins! |
 Rabit157 2004-10-23 . chapter 1That's really beautiful. I don't know weather it's intentional but The fomat seems like a billowing skirt.
A cunning and ambiguous poem. |
 Xandria Nirvana 2004-10-17 . chapter 1cute. and a good question |
 Pico the Great 2004-09-20 . chapter 1Oh I like it! I dunno why, I do, but I do!
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It's got great description, goods color-words, and not too verbose.
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Good job!
-PTG |
 Werecat99 2004-09-05 . chapter 1Aw, that was so sweet! The play of the colors hooked me up instantly. And I loved the last line. A touch of vanity in it, but who cares?
Lovely. Simply lovely.
And thanks for the reviews. |
 Freckles Victorious 2004-08-06 . chapter 1Tolkien is a smurf! okay, that was my password... but now I'm going to change it so ha! and goodly poem. makes you think. i likes the ending. |
 Anonymous 2004-08-05 . chapter 1 It is a very good idea to have a question on the bottom of a poem.
If you have a follow up poem to give another idea of silk path to paradise; maybe a poem titled "A Silk Path to Paradise?"?
After slippers you should have a different puctuation.
I think it sounds better if the word and was removed from in front of chestnut.
Butt I will leave it up to you. |
 Moira Lenore 2004-08-05 . chapter 1Fantastic! I love the idea. Nice job. |
 Stormer 2004-08-05 . chapter 1This was a beautiful description that invoked a lot of different images in my head. I imagined some woman of the Renaissance, walking around with her body aching horribly as a result of the clothes she wore. I also really like how the poem looks on the page - sort of like a triangle. Well, I dunno what sort of shape it is...triangle but what kind? (one side vertical, the other diagonal...) |
 Grey Faerie 2004-08-05 . chapter 1Fantastic! I love it. Both deep and colourful...just brilliant. Great job! |