I wouldn't say it is masterfully written, but it definitely captures a painful realism. Harsh. By the way there's a typo with "so warn on the bottom;" you meant worn.

that's really deep, i cant wait to read the rest...

I'm not really fond of the Danielle character. I know she's there to help, but she seems busy. I know they're supposed to HELP and try to resolve and fix issues in their patients lives, but sometimes they just push him or her too far. Those kind of people really irritate me, and I can sense why Chastity doesn't really like this lady.

With Chastity wanting to be invisible is something a lot of us can feel sometimes, but I sense she has it pretty rough- especially if she doesn't even have a needle and thread. Oh no, and she has an abusive father, who drinks until he's in a state of mind that makes him really crazy. Is he the one that gave her the scars?

This poor girl is suicidal. I do feel bad for her too. And doing drugs too. She needs some serious help. Someone needs to be there for her, but unfortunately life isn't ever that easy.

Now, I've noticed that you haven't updated this, and I'm not pressuring you to do so, but I'm really interested to see where you can take this with your own little spin to it.

Faded Soulfire

I think this is a very decent start. I'm positive that I know of a few people who have been blessed with this girls problem, so choosing to write about something that a lot of girls can relate to is really smart, and a bit easier to grasp.

Although, your prologue was short, and I would have liked to see a bit more- to help make the prologue go BAM! Y'know? But, it is still good and the song 'concrete angel' fits pretty darn good with this.

And, lastly, I had to review this because you have checked out my story, and I think it's only fair of me to review in turn, so don't think that I'm reviewing because I have to. I want to.

Faded Soulfire

Well it's a good start. I like what you have so far, and a lot of people can relate to this story too.

A girl with a miserable life and as if she doesn't care about anything. I wonder where this story is going to lead for her?

Whether or not her attitude will change somehow and she will find something that will spark up her life.

Keep up the good work :)

That is really sad! Anyhoo, nice work! Keep writing.

Aw thats so Sad. I feel her pain.. poor girl.

That's so sad! It's writeen really good but it's so sad! It's a great story though, I love it! How olds the girl in here? (u might have said but i forgot.)Anyway stories like this really reach the heart and i find myself thanking God for my family and the life I live. Anyway write more soon because I'm really interested in what's gonna happen!

This is a good start! I'm interested but then again I'm interested in anything you write! Anyway update soon! (Boken too!)