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| tickledblue 2004-10-28 ch 3,   | i LOVE your story, and i can tell that it's going to be really, really good. you MUST update, or i'll go mad... not really, but you get what i mean, right? 'kay, so update! |
| ^_^ 2004-10-22 ch 3, | please update soon i lik ethis story:) |
| Tk.T 2004-10-03 ch 1, | Is the boy an African slave? Interesting set up you have here...partly curious...so will read up on this a little later. Happy writing! Tk.T~ |
| Becci 2004-09-24 ch 3, | Wow! That was so good! Sorry it took soo long to review but u noe... newayz that was absolutely fantastic and i cant wait for u to write more keep up the good work Becci (ps.ITS HOLIDAY!) |
| metropolis noir 2004-09-15 ch 3, | Wow, that's psychotic. I was wondering what had happened to Sammy through the chapter. I feel so sorry for Nikola. I have to say, you've done an excellent job so far! I can't wait for more! |
| aims80 (too lazy to sign in... 2004-09-15 ch 3, | Very interesting so far, am looking forward to reading some more. |
| penny 2004-09-15 ch 3, | oh this is god! you must update soon! ts gunna drive me nuts if you dont! |
| negligible fictional force 2004-09-15 ch 3, | ack. captivating chapter here, well done! wonderful play of events, i sat stiff as a board on my chair reading this. who... is... sammy? you end on a cliffhanger, too. you emphasize how nikola is so alone. great work! this story goes on my favourites. ^^ -kismet. |
| negligible fictional force 2004-08-22 ch 2, | cinderella with style. *claps* you end on a cliffhanger... *squirms* ah well. i see no improvement... because there was no need for any in the first place. fantastic, as usual. keep it up. |
| ciara 2004-08-13 ch 1, | hey jess, that was really good, umm the email from johno is from my bros friends so don't listen 2 anything is said he was being an idiot, cause i was reading ur story wen he came. anyway...i liked it . heaps good, cya at skool. bye loved it |
| johno 2004-08-13 ch 2, | that was poor u get a F for ** hopeless go back to school |
| metropolis noir 2004-08-12 ch 2, | I see a Cinderella-esque plot brewing. Poor Nikola! Chapter two is really good, I really look forward to more. One thing of note, though, is the sequence of commands her stepmother and sister give her. Make them separate phrases, then it gives more of a rattling off effect. |
| Dutchie 2004-08-12 ch 2, | very good story jess. I'm sure everyone would agree that the quality of this work is far beyond a 16 year old. Keep up the good work. Sure beats anything i can produce and I'm 2 years older... |
| Laura 2004-08-12 ch 2, | Thanks for updating! The story is going really well so far. Your writing style is quite good, and cliffhangers are good. You need them occasionally. Good work! PS - thanks for the special mention in your author's note (puts newly loaded pistol back in hiding spot [jj]) |
| cel 2004-08-11 ch 1, | e! finally! man...so good! and i mean it i swear! trust me^_^ but like...i dun get why the girl would like..hug and kiss the boy...isnt it their first time seeing each other??...like...u know...hahha...but its kol^^ great description and so forth..hehehe! keep writing! ill be ur #1 fan!! |