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Reviews For: A Heart in the Darkness Author's Cut: L Series - Reviews: Page 1 of 2

MiddiVampira
2008-02-20
ch 9,
abuseOMFG that was crazy GOOD. You're a very good author. Can't wait to read the sequel/extra of sorts to this one and more of your work.
Love Middi
outsidersgirl
2007-07-23
ch 1,
abusethis is good
Sarion
2007-02-11
ch 9,
abuseAmazing. Captivating and descriptive. You had me worried for a bit though. Everything seemed "too perfect" at the end and I was horrified to think that after the prom there would be an attack of some sort. I'd have died.
At times I almost got lost in my own head trying to visualize it as a movie. Honestly, this is among the best writing I have ever seen. I always try and visualize as I read and I usually can manage something. With your story however, I honestly got lost thinking it WAS as a movie. The personalities, the atmosphere, the drama... it was perfect. I am highly impressed.
I won't lie, I did skip over most of the last chapter but only because I read these for the love and not so much the sex. What I did read was well described and very tasteful.

You are very talented. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading such artistry.
Jolene
2006-11-20
ch 9, anon.
abuseThis is a really promising story. I think it could use some work though. The writing is too formal, the speech needs to be a little more real. I really liked it though. It was a cute story.
mckie
2006-06-24
ch 9,
abuseyou really dont know what you just did do you that was a real intenses sex scene damnit you better keep aon writing you are my hero
Addicted2music
2006-04-10
ch 9,
abuseAnother wonderful story written! I'm in love with your stories. You're a very talented writer. This was beautiful. I look forward to reading more of your writing. Keep up the great work!
Emma
2005-06-13
ch 9, anon.
abuseWow not a bad story at all ^^ The plot line was great, I mean, some of the things I could seriously relate to. I love how you had a definate start, and a indefinate end to the story, it's just good.

Just a few things you may need to work on is your grammar, like, in a lot of the questions you had no question mark and seemed unended. Also, the dialouge is a bit disjointed most of the way through.

However I thoroughly enjoyed it =D
Tabi Berkey
2005-05-10
ch 1,
abuseinteresting...but at times it felt like nothing but soft **...no story line and at other times, it was great...I don't know...mixed feelings about this...
tigerchick1
2005-04-12
ch 9,
abusewow. this was just a really good story. i actually had to read the whole thing all at once. there were some typos and such of course, but overall it was pretty damn good. the world needs more people who actually write about lesbians, not just make them minor sideplots. please keep writing.
Names dendritic girl, i'll ...
2005-03-27
ch 9, anon.
abuseHey so i don't really know what to say about this story. I think an "I really enjoyed reading it, but some of the dialogue unnerved me, or like, i found it insensitive or... something... " anyway i don't mean that in bad way... I think you're a very good writer and i loved the story, i'll read some more of your stories and then... i'll have made up my mind totally. and you'll get a proper review! good story
I.am.a.Walking.Contradictio...
2005-03-23
ch 1,
abuseI waited until I read the entire story to submitt a review and the only word that comes to mind is WOW! I love how you make the story tender and close to the heart yet at the same time upbeat and at times angering. There were times I wanted to laugh, cry or scream out loud, and there were times that I did. I can't wait to read the other stories in the series. Trully magnificent work. Much Love.
Silvi Sweetheart
2005-02-15
ch 3,
abuseE! This is just creepy, I swear you had to have been following me around with a camera or something in High School... well, my car ride didn't end quite so happily.. but still! I can't wait to see what other things you ripped from my life (just kidding).

xoxo

Silvi
Silvi Sweetheart
2005-02-12
ch 1,
abuseWell, you've probably had more then enough of my gushing by now, so I'll just say that I'm glad you weren't a one hit wonder, this is almost as promising as "Groove To Da Beat", even more so because it's complete. hint hint ^_~

Expect a ton more reviews from me tomorrow, I'll probably read just about everything you've written.

Silvi
Cinera
2005-01-16
ch 9,
abuseThat was a beautiful story. I hope those two are together 4 ever.
Cinera
2005-01-16
ch 8,
abuseOh my gosh, here they go! *crosses fingers*
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