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| Indigo Smith 2006-07-15 ch 1,  | abuseVery good use of metaphors. I liked it. |
| SilentRiver 2006-07-05 ch 1, | abuseThis subject could easily become cliche, but you keep it going nicely. The imagery was pretty, and it had the tone of a lullaby (almost). Keep Writing! |
| Travis C. Eckert 2006-06-30 ch 1, | abuseI guess that is a unicorn to you. |
| Areneth 2006-06-18 ch 1, | abuseI think I have a weakness for unicorns. I liked this poem! A few of the lines didn't flow well, I thought the last stanza felt stifled almost in the end. But I also liked the imagery, it was very nice. |
| skylines 2006-05-02 ch 1, | abusevery nice! excellent use of metaphors, they set the scene quite well. |
| Evelyn Skye 2006-01-04 ch 1, | abusesuch a lovely poem. if it hadn't been for the title, i wouldn't have known it was about a unicorn. the verses are so subtle, as are the descriptions and hints you drop. marvelous work |
| Rawk-Chick 2005-11-15 ch 1, | abuseVery descriptive writing. I like it. Beautiful. |
| Dream of Hope 594 2005-07-11 ch 1, | abuseHey The poem is awsome. I like that it doesn't have a set way to go. it doesn't always rhyme which doesn't bother me one bit. I think poetry should be judged on how it feels rather than actual words. I hope that makes sense. I did find one thing though. The poem kind of hangs at the end like its is not finished.o ther then that great poem. plz r and r some of my stuff thanksand good luck with your writings |
| Conrath 2004-11-28 ch 1, | abusesorry to spoil a good poem... but i think this goes into the poem section rather than the original fiction. Just wanted you to know -Conrath |
| singinstrawberri 2004-09-03 ch 1, anon. | abusei like it a lot, the poem is lovely as the unicorn i'm sure.. one thing i noticed is that it doesn't really seem to end. but anyway, this is mighty enjoyable. |
| CentauriSk 2004-07-19 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful, absolutely beautiful... |
| Wee-lil-pirate 2004-05-18 ch 1, | abusei liked it! very sweet. |
| Elicael, Fire Sarien 2004-05-04 ch 1, | abuseThat was a beautiful poem! I love unicorns, and that describes how i think of them perfectly! you should wrte more of these! |
| Jessica Southgate 2004-03-24 ch 1, | abuse-Unexpected as the summer storm And rages like it too.- Gorgeous opening sentance. I love it. It really sets the tone. -Drowning one in it's warmth- This should be "Drowning one in its warmth". "Its" isn't a contraction in this case. Overall, it has great imagery, and I like it. However, the flow seems a bit broken and jumpy through part of it. Keep up the good work! Jessica |
| the mouse that roared 2004-02-04 ch 1, | abuseI really liked the poem. The imagery was really good. I loved all the comparisons. I could envision the unicorn very well. This is one of the better poems I've read in a while. |