 Indigo Smith 2006-07-15 . chapter 1Very good use of metaphors. I liked it. |
 SilentRiver 2006-07-05 . chapter 1This subject could easily become cliche, but you keep it going nicely. The imagery was pretty, and it had the tone of a lullaby (almost). Keep Writing! |
 Travis C. Eckert 2006-06-30 . chapter 1I guess that is a unicorn to you. |
 Areneth 2006-06-18 . chapter 1I think I have a weakness for unicorns. I liked this poem! A few of the lines didn't flow well, I thought the last stanza felt stifled almost in the end. But I also liked the imagery, it was very nice. |
 skylines 2006-05-02 . chapter 1very nice! excellent use of metaphors, they set the scene quite well. |
 Evelyn Skye 2006-01-04 . chapter 1such a lovely poem. if it hadn't been for the title, i wouldn't have known it was about a unicorn. the verses are so subtle, as are the descriptions and hints you drop.
marvelous work |
 ElizaJune 2005-11-15 . chapter 1Very descriptive writing. I like it. Beautiful. |
 Dream of Hope 594 2005-07-11 . chapter 1Hey The poem is awsome. I like that it doesn't have a set way to go. it doesn't always rhyme which doesn't bother me one bit. I think poetry should be judged on how it feels rather than actual words. I hope that makes sense. I did find one thing though. The poem kind of hangs at the end like its is not finished.o ther then that great poem.
plz r and r some of my stuff thanksand good luck with your writings |
 Conrath 2004-11-28 . chapter 1sorry to spoil a good poem... but i think this goes into the poem section rather than the original fiction.
Just wanted you to know
-Conrath |
 singinstrawberri 2004-09-03 . chapter 1 i like it a lot, the poem is lovely as the unicorn i'm sure.. one thing i noticed is that it doesn't really seem to end. but anyway, this is mighty enjoyable. |
 CentauriSk 2004-07-19 . chapter 1Beautiful, absolutely beautiful... |
 Wee-lil-pirate 2004-05-18 . chapter 1i liked it! very sweet. |
 WordSarien 2004-05-04 . chapter 1That was a beautiful poem! I love unicorns, and that describes how i think of them perfectly! you should wrte more of these! |
 Jessica Southgate 2004-03-24 . chapter 1-Unexpected as the summer storm
And rages like it too.-
Gorgeous opening sentance. I love it. It really sets the tone.
-Drowning one in it's warmth-
This should be "Drowning one in its warmth". "Its" isn't a contraction in this case.
Overall, it has great imagery, and I like it. However, the flow seems a bit broken and jumpy through part of it.
Keep up the good work!
Jessica |
 the mouse that roared 2004-02-04 . chapter 1I really liked the poem. The imagery was really good. I loved all the comparisons. I could envision the unicorn very well. This is one of the better poems I've read in a while. |