Well written. Thanks for the good read. :)

Lovely expression. I very much enjoy poems that can grace commonplace subjects with unique interpretations. I think you did a very nice job here of expressing something painful in an original way. Good use of repetition backed with good solid poetic expression.

omg. that was really amazing. Beautiful in every sense of the world. You have a way of capturing that elusive hopeful pain that so few can. Well done.

You have come a long way Wren,seriously! I really like this poem, but I would like to see some more happy poems? lol. You can be a bit morbid. I understand it's hard to write the opposite of how you're feelin, but I found that its a great exercise to do so, and also helps to change your mood.
Proverbs 18:20-21
20 A man's stomach shall be filled from the fruit oh his mouth; From the produce od his lips he shall be filled.
21 Death and life are at the power of the tongue. Those who love it will eat its fruit.

The title cuaght my eye. I'm glad I read it. it's pretty good.
~SM